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A Mistaken Crime – #drabble

January 1, 2017


A Mistaken Crime

“There’s no way he makes it inside.”

“I’ll bet ya twenty he does.”

“It’s your money. Too many lights. Probably a hi-tech security system too.”

“You don’t know Pete. Best burglar around.”

Josh and Scottie stand behind a tree, peek out a few times. Josh spots the two flashes in the center window. Pete’s in.

“Told ya he’d make it in.”

“Yeah, but can he make it out?”

Josh shrugs his shoulders. They continue to watch and wait. Suddenly, a tap on their backs. Damn, cops.

Peepin’ Toms, eh?

Pete shimmies down a drain pipe. Bag slung over shoulder. Slithers away.

©2017 Lori Carlson. All rights reserved.

(100 words)

for Sunday Photo Fiction


  1. Please remind me to never hire those two as a lookout if I ever do a crime! Hahaha.

  2. Very nice!

  3. ha! Very nicely done; love the ending.

  4. Haha love it. Greta how the lookout are caught but the burglar isn’t. Hmmm that’s something I never thought I would hear myself say lol

    • *laughs* thanks.. glad you enjoyed the story. I like to give my stories an unexpected twist if I can 😀

  5. jmwwriting permalink

    Haha, nice.

  6. Ha, nice twist that Pete gets away with it and his accomplices get caught. Well done.

  7. Graham Lawrence permalink

    Lovely little story.

  8. Nicely done 🙂

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