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Killing Time – #drabble

December 30, 2016

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PHOTO PROMPT © Shaktiki Sharma

Killing Time

I cruised by slowly. Everything looked hazy.

“What’s your pleasure tonight?” I asked.

“Girls? Cocaine?” I inquired.

“Already high. I vote girls,” I decided.

I nodded my head. “Good choice.”

I drove past the drug corner and toward the red light section of town. I slowed down when I reached the girls.

“Blonde?”

“Redhead. I need some fire tonight.”

I nodded. “Good choice. Tall or petite?”

“Petite. I feel the need to dominate tonight.”

I rolled down the window. Yelled at the petite redhead. Flashed a Benjie. She sashayed over. Got in.

Ten blocks of silence. Four hours of screams.

©2016 Lori Carlson. All rights reserved.

(100 words)


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15 Comments
  1. Extremely well written – going to stay with me for a while

  2. Raw street sprinkled with bada–. I liked it a lot. Extremely … well written.
    A walk I took with the photo prompt too. It looks like the photo brought out the dark side in many.
    Happy New Year 2017 🎉 Cheers 🍷
    Isadora 😎

    • Thanks, Isadora (love your name by the way.. may have to use it in a story some day!)
      I look forward to reading yours (I will get to it today!)
      Happy New Year to you as well 🙂

      • Thank you for the compliment on my name. It’s a big shoe to wear as a child but now works well for my artist life. I’ll look forward to your comment on my story. Thanks again … Isadora 😎

  3. Crazy creepy! I kept wondering why is this character talking to himself? Because he’s a psycho killer. Didn’t see that coming but should have. Nice.

  4. Dale permalink

    Why do I feel all creepy now…

  5. Scary! Nicely done!

  6. Dear Lori,

    Why did my mind go to Pulp Fiction? I like the inner dialogue, even though it was ugly.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  7. Yeeks! Like the inner (or outer) monologue. Nice one.
    I’d love to know what a “Benjie” is, though. Google was no help 🙂

    • Benjie is a $100 bill.. Benjamin Franklin… I’ve heard friends who’re heavy into drugs refer to a $100 bill as a Benjie before… (I could have spelled it incorrectly, but eh, it will do for the story)

      • Thanks! On TV programmes people often refer to a note’s amount by the person on it, and since I’ve never seen American money in real life, I never have any idea how much they’re talking about 🙂

      • Ah! Well, happy to help you out 😀

  8. Dang. Well done.

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